I found some reviews of Portal over at Web Fiction Guide a few days ago. I want to thank misve, anonymous, Paragon, and Tempest for giving Portal stars. Paragon and Tempest even wrote short reviews of the story with what they like and don’t like . All well-reasoned critiques are helpful and appreciated.
Without giving away spoilers, I hope the end of Portal and the sequel will address some of the concerns in the reviews. Not all of the chapters are linear by design and will explore events in the past that influence the present (like Chapter 68). I have sprinkled a few hints throughout Portal that will become clearer as the story progresses.